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Saturday, October 22, 2022

Writing: Write What You Know

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Are you thinking, what does "write what you know" actually mean? Or that you don't know anything significant. Some of the most "insignificant" things are very significant. So, writing what you know is really kind of simple for the most part, depending on what the knowledge is. Whether about nuclear power or the workings of the heart, both physically, and most certainly, emotionally.


Wednesday, September 07, 2022

Neale Sourna's Writer's Tidbits Creating Creative Writing/Research _ POC/Black Historical Fiction (BHF) @ Patreon.com/NealeSourna

 

About Neale Sourna's Writer's Tidbits

MISSION: To SHARE Historical Black, African, and People of Color (POC) Fiction author historical research references, story prompts, writer hacks, and links for writers and readers of People of Color Historical fiction and nonfiction.

Providing you with writing trigger topics and bits of history you never considered were a possibility. Or "someone" said it never was / never could have happened like that. They're wrong. And probably actually existed, was forgotten, ignored, or cast aside.

Plus, I'll be giving brief personal analyses on: character, a writer’s journey, and more that may prove helpful in creating your own colorful characters, in-depth stories, and completed published works.

NEED HELP:
  • How to build an idea into a story?
  • How to create interesting characters?
  • How to keep your writer sanity sane?
  • How to see or feel a writing trigger or a character trigger and what questions can get you to where you want to go.

WHY? WHAT'S IN IT FOR YOU?


  • Finding relevant reference materials remains scattered and haphazard. Searching for historical information for People of Color isn't just as easy as digging out your old school history books.
          Most often we aren't mentioned, well, not as thoroughly and heroically as European males.
  • Writing historically about People of Color to bring something new to readers' minds and emotions about People of Color in History is the plan.
    We are people, with the same or similar wants, drives, hopes as everyone else.
          Ethnic cultures are the unique seasoning for the people we were, are, and want to be and I hope to help you find thought and feel points on cultural points of view (POV) you never considered.
  • Finding material that gives us a mental or emotional writing prompt, an urge to build it into a scene, one story, or an entire series.

Maybe its a tapestry image of an African Brit trumpeter for Henry VIII of England, a notice about a foreign black officer soldier who fought for King Henry VIII and his son, Edward—a man of African descent Knighted (Sir Pedro).

Or ... hm, what time periods of historical films do you love and want to see yourself in?

To be blunt, those of European descent, usually male, write themselves into the history of the Great Wall of China, Polynesia, and running with Mongol hordes. 

If Europeans "might" be there, why not Africans, like Yasuke, the "Black Samurai / Black Ronin" or "African Samurai / African Ronin"?

  • Plus, marketing and making connections outside of the larger African American Book Clubs, when "lists" for Black Historical Fiction and Literature, because most are only rearranged rewrites of the SAME lists of older / classic African American or Black American tales. 
    • For example. Try searching for "African British Historical Fiction" sometime and see what limited material comes up. Even just African British, when Africans have been in Europe since, at least, Roman times. 
    • Or look for "African American Historical Fiction" that's not Z. N. Hurston, A. Walker, etc.
    • Yes. Some newer books get listed but, you have to scroll and scroll to find the newer stories about older, more varied, or different tales.

NOW. WHO AM I…?

Neale Sourna (www.Neale-Sourna.com), an award-winning author / publisher - screenwriter - game story narrative writer, based in the Greater Cleveland, Ohio, USA area. My novel and short story writing grew from self-prescribed short story exercises to work out ideas for TV scripts and feature screenplays.

My first published work was the short story "Hesitation" for PLAYGIRL, May 2002. 

“Characters should have depth and reality, and be unique in their own way.”

Some awards include my first published novel 
HOBBLE which won Best Romantic Erotica of the Year from BlackRefer.com; screenplay FRAMES which ranked as a New Century Screenplay Finalist; and Best storytelling @ White Nights Conference Game Narrative Awards for online video game METROPOLIS: LUX OBSCURAhttp://www.neale-sourna.com/scriptgateway.html

I am a member of the Writer's Guild of America - West (WGA-w)'s Video Game Caucus.

I also edit and design (ebook and book covers plus interior layouts) of the character-driven stories published through PIE: Perception Is Everything (www.PIE-Percept.com), which is my author-publishing company.

EVER HEAR OF "WRITE WHAT YOU KNOW”?

A little bit of everything in my life goes into my writing, because I believe in building characters who have unique depth, freshness, and reader memorability. So, they get some degree of my thoughts, emotions, and experience or that of someone I know directly or by observation.

Plus, with a lifelong love of learning and with life experience as a temp and perm employee in various fields besides writing; including: retail, business banking and wealth management, accounting, engineering, live theatre, cinema, music (vocal, instruments, and radio), erotic photo modeling, historical and cultural research, and even a little microgravity research at NASA.

You never know what comes in handy for writing characters and plots.

EDUCATION:

  • Cuyahoga Community College’s Digital Film & Editing, Game Design Building; plus studies in Music Theory & Harmony. 
  • Graduate level Film & Video writing and analysis at American University, DC. 
  • A Performing Fine Arts Bachelor Degree from Lake Erie College, OH in Music, Photography, Painting, and Live Theater Stage Management and Theater Management
  • An undergrad-intern semester at Mount Vernon College with the National Endowment for the Arts Opera-Musical Theatre Financial Distribution Program. 
  • And an academic term alone abroad in Vienna, Austria just living, making friends, and learning.

A MISCELLANEOUS FUN FACT.
I share a birthday with sensual and sensational authors the Marquis de Sade of France and Thomas Hardy of England.
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Saturday, October 23, 2021

A Secret Island Treasure to Inspire Storytelling

 https://www.bbc.com/travel/article/20211020-the-rainbow-island-most-travellers-dont-know

With ochre-stained streams, crimson-hued beaches and enchanting salt caves, Iran's Hormuz Island is a geologist's Disneyland.

"You should get a taste of this soil," said Farzad Kay, my tour guide on southern Iran's Hormuz Island, as we stood at the foot of a ruby-red mountain that loomed majestically over the shoreline, engulfing the beach and waves in a crimson shadow. I approached his suggestion with some trepidation, as I was yet to understand this mysterious, mineral-laden landscape.

Set 8km off Iran's coast amid the murky blue waters of the Persian Gulf, Hormuz is a teardrop-shaped shimmering salt dome embedded with layers of shale, clay and iron-rich volcanic rocks that glow in dazzling shades of red, yellow and orange due to the more than 70 minerals found here. Nearly every inch of Hormuz Island's 42 awe-invoking sq km imparts a story of its formation.

According to Dr Kathryn Goodenough, principal geologist at the British Geological Survey who has previously worked in Iran, hundreds of millions of years ago, shallow seas formed thick layers of salt around the margins of the Persian Gulf. These layers gradually collided and interlayered with mineral-rich volcanic sediment in the area, causing the formation of the colourful landmass.

"Over the last 500 million years, the salt layers were buried deeply by younger layers of volcanic sediment. Since the salt is buoyant, over time, it has risen through cracks in the overlying rocks to reach the surface and form salt domes," said Dr Goodenough. She added that these thick layers of salt, many kilometres below the land, are actually present across much of the Persian Gulf area.

This geological makeup has resulted in ochre-stained streams, crimson-hued beaches and enchanting salt caves. In fact, Hormuz is often called the "rainbow island" because of the spectrum of chromatic hues that it exudes. It's also home to what's thought to be the only edible mountain in the world, which Kay was encouraging me to try.

Locals believe that the salt found at the Goddess of Salt mountain has the power to release any negative energy (Credit: Saeed Abdolizadeh/Alamy)

Locals believe that the salt found at the Goddess of Salt mountain has the power to release any negative energy (Credit: Saeed Abdolizadeh/Alamy)

The red soil on the mountain I was standing near, called gelack, is caused by haematite, an iron oxide thought to be derived from the island's volcanic rocks. Not only is it a valuable mineral for industrial purposes, it also plays an important role in local cuisine. Used as a spice, it lends an earthy flavour to curries and goes perfectly with the local bread called tomshi, which means "a handful of something".

"The red soil is used as a sauce," explained Maryam Peykani, Farzad's wife. "This sauce is called soorakh and is spread on flatbread as it is almost cooked. Apart from its culinary usages, the red soil is also used [in paintings by] local artists, dyeing, creation of ceramics and cosmetics."

Beyond the ruby-red mountain, there's plenty else to explore on Hormuz. In the island's west there's a spectacular salt mountain known as the Goddess of Salt. Extending more than a kilometre, its pale caves and sharp-edged walls are covered by shimmering salt crystals that look like the giant columns of a marble palace.

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Locals believe that the salt possesses the healing power to soak up and release any negative energy, and Kay advised me to take my shoes off so my feet touched the salt dome. "The rock salt is known to release immense positive energy," he told me. "After having spent [time] in this valley, you are bound to feel much more invigorated, which is why the valley is also called the Energy Valley."

Similarly, in the island’s south-west is Rainbow Valley, a stunning display of multi-hued soil and vividly coloured mountains in shades of red, purple, yellow, ochre and blue. As I walked, I noticed patches of bright colours forming geometric patterns that glittered and gleamed as the sun's rays hit them.

In the nearby Valley of the Statues, rocks were weathered into fantastical shapes by thousands of years of wind erosion; with a bit of imagination, I could see birds, dragons and other mythical creatures. It was like admiring Earth's very own art gallery.

The island glows in shades of red, yellow and orange due to the more than 70 minerals found here (Credit: Lukas Bischoff/Alamy)

The island glows in shades of red, yellow and orange due to the more than 70 minerals found here (Credit: Lukas Bischoff/Alamy)

Despite the island’s surreal, kaleidoscopic natural colours, most travellers don't know about it. According to the Ports and Maritime Organization of Iran, just 18,000 visitors came here in 2019.

"This natural phenomenon is not fully discovered by world travellers despite its significant tourist attractions, historically and naturally," said Ershad Shan, another local, as I sank my teeth into a spicy, fragrant curry of sardines, red onion, lemon and orange, prepared using soorakh. "If more attention is paid to the infrastructural development of Hormuz, this island can be changed to be an important attraction for tourists."

Locals have started to offer home-cooked meals for tourists and driving rickshaws and motorcycles to transport people around the island. "We feel responsible for doing our bit for Hormuz. It's so rare and is a part of our identity," Shan said. "We feel an urgent need to contribute towards getting the world to take notice of this eco-heritage."

As I devoured my curry, it struck me that while Hormuz is without doubt a geologist's Disneyland, it is the edible soil, which is literally runs through the veins of its inhabitants, that make it truly special.

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Saturday, September 05, 2020

Another "Simple" Way I Name Characters_Sep 5, 2020 at 10:26 PM EST

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This is a simple naming technique when writer characters and degenerating character names.

 

When I travel, to work or wherever, my stories and characters are percolating in the back or to the fore of my mind. Street addresses to name a character. Especially, ones that come one after another or conjoin at intersections can be helpful; because you can find interesting character names.

 

Just keep in mind if what you come up with relates to their ethnicity or culture, time period, financial level, etc.

 

Happy hunting.

 

More helpful tips at....

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Tuesday, July 19, 2016

Example 3 of writing and rewriting for clients; 2nd rewrite: Perking Up Boring Romance (Action) Writing

Example 3 of writing and rewriting for clients; 2nd rewrite:
Perking Up Boring Romance (Action) Writing

By Neale Sourna


Are your stories of sizzling love fizzling out like tired champagne; more flavored water than sparkling? Well, romance (falling in love) is an action that needs to be active; so, ruthlessly search your bland scenes to locate blah moments to reshape into tender moments that spark alive your readers’ senses, imagination, and fears, by adding little triggers that exploit, in a good way, your readers’ emotions and expectations, by...

WRITING TO OUR SENSES

The easiest way to slip deeper into your characters and readers’ minds and hearts is to take individual editing passes through your stories, concentrating on one sense at a time, to add when each lover can see, hear, touch, smell (let’s say “scent,” sounds less odious), and taste. It adds flavor and sparks sensory interest right away.

Why?

Because most of us have five senses for perceiving the world around us. We know what a fresh, crisp sweet apple or a fresh, crisp tart apple tastes like, know the scent of hot bread, floral cologne, musk on a body that attracts us, or musk from somebody who repels us.

Writing to our senses adds instant tactility and reality; luring a reader deeper into your world. We’ll feel the hug that relaxes us in a plump grandmother's arms or the sharp bite of a sadist's whip drawing blood from our backs, while making us bite our tongues against the pain to taste.....

This technique is especially useful for writers who think excessively more than allow the feeling and their story characters do too. They think, they thought, they realize…. 

Stop.

Step out of your head and your readers will follow into their sense body and emotions. Sounds and scents and touch and sight can trigger emotions, both good and bad, long-standing or passing. So, use all of your main characters' senses; it makes them more real to us, turning them into real people.

The first time I did this in a script it made everything pop and more rich. Of course, don’t use it in every sentence, till we puke, unless that's the plan; but, it helps add the sparkle of life, so do it.

BUT, DON’T FORGET SENSE #6

Depending on your genre and character types, your couple or one of them may have a sense of “knowing.” I know many close relatives or friends who actually do this in their own lives. It's when one has an unexplainable knowing, from simply being able to sense their lover's unplanned arrival or phone call, or to feel unreasonably agitated enough that they must rush to make certain their wife, husband, child, or friend is safe.

It may just be a feeling of assured faith and knowing the other will rescue them, love them forever, or hasn’t truly left them.

It can also be that “jinx” thing, when two people say or do the same thing at the same time. I do this all the time with family members and close friends. It's just two people feeling the same vibe, or recalling the same shared experience. It is weirdly fun and adds a layer of intimate bonding.

AND DON’T FORGET THE LACK OF OUR SENSES

“When I entered I couldn’t sense him, not even that gentle scent of his cologne, and not that gentle vibration that always signaled that he’s nearby.”

“Disconcertingly, although we were in the dance’s embrace, I felt, sensed, whatever, her body harden and edge away from me; the worse was holding her yet in my arms, but feeling I was abruptly alone.”

DISCOVERY & RESPONSE

Here’s more help.

Your character people experience love, suffer, die, and some are reborn as vampires or zombies in love. It's in your hands how your lovers discover and rediscover what they feel, what they understand and when, and how, when or if they respond to this stimuli.

In the novel HOBBLE, the relationship of my main couple, Day and Benn, is highly erotic, an instant bonfire, but a significant and more important and binding part of their story plays on psychological levels of dependency, on spiritual need both oppressed and heightened, and on discovering their most romantically needy and protected selves, hidden even from themselves, while their responses to having such needs met pulls each deeper into emotional involvement and investment in the other.

Example, Benn has a hidden and unspoken desire for his lovers show him PDA (public displays of affection). He's been in relationships with professional women and also one who belonged to a religious cultural background that discourages such openness; so he's never brought it up, nor truly allows himself to expect it.

Day, however, as a woman long abused and crippled (hobbled) on many levels has nearly a psychic manner in knowing what they desire. So, Day understands Benn on levels he doesn't understand himself, until his involvement with her.

In turn, he instills in her a feeling of security and love, making her discover that she needn't tolerate others' unwanted desires and that she's worthy of more than being a sexual plaything, and responds by demanding more.

Our senses are easy things to use, leading your characters and readers into more interesting levels, perking up your readers' sensory involvement in the intimate discoveries of your hero and heroine. 

Because when we better visualize and feel, it generates a response within us.

_889 wds

Client kind of liked yet not satisfied with it and asked if I minded if they would rewrite to suit themselves. No, don't mind. 

I've worked with with client a long time ago, but didn't mention it to them. It's nice to know it's just conflict of style. 

My repeat clients and most of my single clients, well, we match and complete one another. Sometimes not so much... End of this visual tale.

Example 2 of writing for clients, rewrite of initial order: Perking Up Boring Romance (Action) Writing

Example 2 of writing for clients, rewrite of initial order:
Perking Up Boring Romance (Action) Writing
 

By Neale Sourna

Hey, are your stories of sizzling love fizzling out like tired champagne, that’s more flavored water than sparkling? Well, romance (falling in love) is an action; so, we’re going ruthlessly search our bland scenes and discover little tender moments to spark our readers’ senses, imagination, and fears, then add the little stuff that exploits our own and your readers’ emotions and expectations.

WRITE TO OUR SENSES

The easiest way to get deeper into your readers’ minds and hearts, and into your characters, is to take individual editing passes through your stories, concentrating one at a time, adding when your couple can SEE, HEAR, TOUCH, SMELL (let’s say “scent,” sounds less odious), and TASTE. It adds flavor and sparks interest right away.

Why?

Because all of us, or nearly all, have all or most of these senses and know what a fresh, crisp SWEET APPLE or a fresh, crisp TART APPLE TASTES like. The SCENT of HOT BREAD, FLORAL COLOGNE, MUSK on a warm body you love. Or WARM MUSK from a body that repels you.

Sensing adds instant tactility and reality; drawing us deeper into your world, so we’ll FEEL the HUG that relaxes us and the SHARP BITE of a whip from a sadist drawing BLOOD from our backs and making us BITE our TONGUES to TASTE.....

This technique is especially useful for those of us who think A LOT and our characters do too. They think, they thought, they realize…. Stop.

Get out of your head, and INTO THEIR BODIES AND EMOTIONS. Use ALL of your senses for your character people; it makes them more real to us. The first time I did this in a script it made everything pop and more rich. Of course, don’t use it in EVERY sentence, till we puke; but, it helps you add LIFE, so do it.

BUT, DON’T FORGET SENSE #6

Depending on your story genre and the type of characters, your couple or one of them may have a sense of “knowing” when the other is simply arriving or FEEL UNREASONABLY agitated enough that they must rush to find them because....

Or it may just be a FEELING of faith in which one or both KNOWS the other will rescue them, love them, or hasn’t truly left them.

Or that “jinx” thing, when two people say or do the same thing at the same time. I do this all the time with family members and close friends. We’re just on the same track, FEELING the same vibe, or recalling the same shared experience. It is weirdly fun and adds a layer of intimate bonding.

AND DON’T FORGET THE LACK OF OUR SENSES

“When I entered I couldn’t sense him, not even that gentle scent of his cologne, and not that gentle vibration that always signaled that he’s nearby.”

“Disconcertingly, although we were in the dance’s embrace, I felt, sensed, whatever, her body harden and edge away from me; the worse was holding her yet in my arms, but feeling I was abruptly alone.”

DISCOVERY & RESPONSE

Here’s a little more help. Your characters, your people experience their lives and love, suffer, die, and get reborn as vampires and zombies. Okay, vamps and z’s are only in some cases. But, you, dear storyteller, are our only Guide into this unique world and characters you have shaped, and how your people discover and rediscover themselves and react and respond to it will keep us reading, and sharing your books.

Think about an historical era character who is rescued by a gentleman and, perhaps, now owes the safety of her “virtue” and her life to him. And when he asks can he contact her family, she has no answer.

Hm. Why? I don’t fully know yet, it’s a new work in progress for me; but, for my new heroine, her hero’s question:

Makes her DISCOVER she’s UNCOMFORTABLE (feeling) giving him that information.
 

She also DISCOVERS she FEELS bad about withholding this from him since he’s been nice, respectful, and he’s attractive. Yum.
 

But, she’s not going to cave and give her private information, now (logic action, thoughts controlling her emotions); her reasons are a can of crawly worms she doesn’t want to get into yet, or maybe ever.
This woman will disclose much later, when the EMOTIONAL STAKES ARE HIGHER BETWEEN HEROINE AND HERO; but not now, which also helps my storytelling and yours—postponing, delaying the consummation and climax on this one subject.

That’s only half of telling an intimate story of two (or more) people interacting.

He’s in your written scene, too, and he’s been gracious, kind, etcetera, plus, he’s a man for whom the world usually bends to his will, and although he understands that she is afraid; still:

He’s wondering what the heck is up with a woman apparently alone and who has just survived multiple traumas. Why doesn’t she want her family...? 

Maybe she’s not so innocent?


As you, storyteller, think and FEEL what he feels and thinks, you and he are wondering if she’s decided he’s a bigger, juicier catch than the man from whom he rescued her...? 

FEEL it? Now doesn’t that spark and perk up all our SENSE involvement in the intimate, individual DISCOVERIES of your hero and heroine? When we can VISUALIZE and FEEL their distinct confusions and sensualities, in conflict with what they fear and want, it generates a RESPONSE in us, your readers.

_900 wds meets the length requested and made changes requested; but...
requested 2nd rewrite next post...

Example 1 of writing for clients: Perking Up Boring Romance (Action) Writing

Example 1 of writing for clients:
Perking Up Boring Romance (Action) Writing

By Neale Sourna


Hey, are your stories of sizzling love fizzling out like tired champagne that’s more flavored water than sparkling? Well, let’s generate some sparks and flames. And it won’t be painful, not unless you make it so. So don’t.

You see it in films and TV shows, two actors standing together and supposedly in a budding or growing or full-blown relationship … and yet you don’t believe them. You feel nothing for them, not truly. You don’t care what really happens to them, especially not as two who should be together.

When someone writes this, you say you can do better: when it’s your own characters it’s … painful, and frustrating. Have you written…?

TO OUR SENSES

One of the easiest ways to get deeper into your readers’ minds and hearts and into your characters, because CHARACTER IS EVERYTHING, is to take several editing passes through your stories, concentrating one at a time, and add when your couple can see, hear, touch, smell (let’s say “scent,” sounds less odious), and taste. It adds flavor and sparks interest right away.

Why?

Because all of us, or nearly all, have all or most of these senses and know what a fresh, crisp sweet apple or a fresh, crisp tart apple tastes like. The scent of hot bread, floral cologne, musk on a warm body that you love. Or musk from a body that repels you.

Naughty right? Plus, you’ve just drawn us into your world that we feel the hug that relaxes you and the bite of a whip from a sadist that draws your blood and makes you bite your tongue to taste…?

This is especially useful for those of us who think A LOT and say our characters do too. They think, they thought, they realize….

Get out of your head, and theirs. Try using all of your senses for your people. The first time I did this in a script it made everything pop and more rich. Of course, don’t use it in every sentence, but you can add that spark, so do.

DON’T FORGET SENSE #6

Depending on your story and the type of characters, your couple or one of them may have a sense of “knowing” when the other is arriving or feel agitated that they must call home or get to wherever they are because their partner needs them badly.

Or it may just be a feeling of faith in which one or both KNOWS the other will rescue them, love them, hasn’t truly left them.

Or that “jinx” thing, when two people say or do the same thing at the same time. I do this all the time with family members and close friends. We’re just on the same track, feeling the same vibe, or recalling the same shared experience and now this is the another layer to it.

AND DON’T FORGET THE LACK OF OUR SENSES

“When I entered I couldn’t sense him, not even that gentle scent of his cologne, and not that vibration that signaled … him and his nearby presence.”

“Disconcertingly, although we were in the dance’s embrace, I felt, sensed her pull away from me; her body hardened, edged away from me; but, the worse was that, while still holding her, I abruptly felt alone.”

DISCOVERY & RESPONSE

Your characters, your people experience their world, like you and I and our family and friends do. They are real, in that world, and can be in your readers’ minds and hearts. Who hasn’t grown up and had to have it explained to them that, no, Sherlock Holmes who lives at 221-B Bakers Street isn’t and never was a living, breathing person. Are you certain?

Your characters live, love, suffer, die, and get reborn as vampires and zombies, okay, vamps and z’s are only in some cases. You, however, are our Guide in this individual world you have shaped, you are the Guide to who your people are and how they discover and rediscover themselves and react and respond to it.

Think about an historical era character who is rescued by a gentleman and, perhaps, now owes him her “virtue” and maybe even her life. And when he asks can he contact her family, she has no answer. Why? I don’t fully know yet, it’s a new work in progress for me; but, for her, his question:

Makes her stutter to a pause, and discover she’s uncomfortable giving him that information.

She also discovers she feels bad about withholding this from him because he’s been really nice, respectful, and he’s kind of really attractive.

And she’s not going to cave and give her private information now; it’s a can of crawly worms she doesn’t want to got into yet, or maybe ever. She will much later, but not now, which also helps your storytelling, postponing, delaying consummation and climax.

That’s only part of it, half of your writing because you are telling an intimate story of two (or more) people interacting and he’s in the scene, too, and he’s been gracious, kind, etcetera and he’s a man who commands respect and the world usually bends to his will and although he understands that she is afraid; still:

He’s gonna wonder what the heck is up with a woman all alone in the world who’s just survived multiple traumas and he’s giving her carte blanche to return to her family or at least contact them. 

If you yourself helped someone escape a violent danger and took them home, wouldn’t you feel or think this is strange behaviour; especially in a time when most women never went farther than five miles from home their entire lives?


He’s also thinking he’s powerful and wealthy, or at least you are thinking and feeling these things for or with him and wondering if maybe she might just decided he’s a big, juicy catch of the day for her and she’s got, hm, who or what she’s avoiding as family?

Now with all our SENSES involved with them and your layering of your possible or actual lovers DISCOVERY of their own confusions, senses, and sensuality in conflict with themselves in wanting to be attractive and tractable but, instead, generating a negative RESPONSE….

WATCH YOUR TONE!

Okay, you don’t want to get too naughty, or you do; you don’t want to fall into erotica, and just want to stay in romance or romantic. Fine. That’s your choice, it’s your story make it your style(s), done in your way.

I and my friends can read Dr. Seuss like it’s porn; it’s all in the tone that you control as soft or hard, making it merely romance, harder romance, erotica romance, romantic erotica, or erotica. “What’s in a name?” What is your tone?

Some stories require an austere, upright, aloof manner. Others require an open friendly, “Here, dude,” or “Here, girlfriend,” sense to it. Hm, another SENSE, people. 

Stream or watch a recording that you can control, by going back and listening and watching and listening for how words are said, which words are used (because differing education levels and other matters can alter or change that.

I love theater and work as a stage manager sometimes, which gives me the chance to watch actors choose, discard, and make new choices in rehearsals how to express those words, or the hidden meaning or a contrast of them, and what movements or stillness, how LOUD or how softly whispered, or intensely hushed….

You don’t have to work backstage, but you should have the eyes and ears of a stage manager who has scrutinized over many hours and many weeks the many ways to express what the writer wants AND what the director wants as a layer of that director’s expression of the material. 

If you can go to live theater dramas, comedies, and tragedies done in our local area. Yes, we all watch television and all watch films but you don’t always ACTIVELY LISTEN for HOW actors or “real” people caught on the news SAY things with their mouths, SAY things with their eyes, or just with their mute expression or body attitude. HOW they move their bodies, HOW they express with and without words.

Does a character hum when they are nervous? Sing when they are happy? I’ve been known to hum “Whistle While You Work” when I’m intensely annoyed at work but must still handle many people or difficult ones. 

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Client's requested rewrite changes in next post.

Thursday, April 07, 2016

My answer to a possible client. Actually, I seemed to have worked for this person....

My answer to a possible client. Actually, I seemed to have worked for this person / group before; and they were unpleasant in the work last Aug and I had to arbitrate at Guru.com in early Sept last.

The same client I.D. invited me last Sept. I reminded them we were apparently in dispute.

The same client I.D. invited me again this month, we've been talking amiably. I've finally had to ask, if they have more than one person using the ID. Or the person is.... What?

My answer to this possible client, re-client? about not playing CYOA games:

CLIENT: ...but you don't seem to play at all.


NealeSourna's Writing-Naked.com:

Gaming is not calming to me. I find limited personal fun and interest in them. That goes for card and table games, even chess, as well. It's just the way my brain functions.

I bore easily with playing the system; but making the puzzle of a well-told story about great characters that a client can come back to again and again is of high interest, though.

Other game companies have not even asked about play activity before ordering, they answer my questions from my game research and guide me with their corrections to suit what they specifically need and want, especially for new genres and then publish the stories I crafted for them.

There are a LOT of different styles and platforms, after all. Story and how to entertain are the cross over between RPG, CYO, and other successfully published online or card games I've worked on.

Thank You,
Neale

Thursday, March 03, 2016

Cinema Law: What Does “Work For Hire” Mean for Moviemakers? By Gregory R. Kanaan on March 2, 2016

http://www.moviemaker.com/archives/blogs/cinema_law/work-for-hire-moviemakers/

Writers this applies to the page of any sort: short story, novel, stage play, film script, game....

Most clients I've interacted with THINK AND BELIEVE, incorrectly, that these three words together means they own your work, without giving you an outline without giving you a substantial payment, and without your name attached and hostilely shutting you down about using it as a work sample.

At least Hollywood normally attaches your name to the work for your portfolio.

Me. Always insert in your contract or notes exchanged between you and the client those hand car dealer words: As Is. Meaning this story in this exact form only, in case that short story grows into a novel or three or a screenplay, etc.
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GoFish

Q: I was hired to work on a film as a DP and the contract stated that it was a “work for hire.” I’ve seen that in a bunch of employment contracts, but I never really understood what it meant. Can you shed some light on it?


The work for hire (WFH) doctrine deals with your ownership rights over the copyright to any work you produce for someone else. Unfortunately, it’s so often misunderstood by both employees and employers that I think people get it wrong more often than they get it right. And since most filmmakers make their living by creating their work on someone else’s dime, they rely heavily on the WFH doctrine, even if the terms “work for hire” or “work made for hire” are never uttered. So to clarify things, here’s a brief primer on WFH. Buckle up, it’s about to get informative!

 

What Is Work For Hire?


The WFH doctrine is a very specific legal principle that arises under U.S. copyright law. The basic premise is that in certain situations, an employer will automatically own the copyright to work you do for them as a matter of right. But the manner in which an employer can assert that right depends heavily on whether you’re hired as an employee or an independent contractor.

 

The Employee Work For Hire


If you’re hired as an employee, the work you create for your employer doesn’t belong to you, it automatically belongs to the employer. End of story. In employment situations, the ownership of copyright is not determined by the artist’s handiwork; it’s determined by the motive and desire of the employer. How will you know if you’re in an employment situation?

Look for the traditional trappings of employment: salary, benefits, co-workers, office, boss, limited control over your work, etc. If you find yourself in this situation, the only way you can retain the copyright to work you’ve created is if the employer gives it to you in writing.

For example, if you’re hired as a full-time editor at a production company, any work you do within the scope of your employment (i.e. editing, color correction, mixing) will automatically be owned by the production company. This, by the way, may also extend to work you create outside your employment too, especially if that outside work falls within the scope of work you would have created for the employer.

But you and I both know that most filmmakers don’t work as employees; more often than not they work as freelancers. And when you’re hired as a freelancer, the rules change dramatically.

 

The Independent Contractor/Freelancer Work For Hire


If you’re hired as an independent contractor or freelancer, the employer will own the copyright to your work only if all of these requirements are met:

1. The work is custom-ordered or commissioned;

2. Both parties agree in writing that it’s a work for hire;

3. The work falls into one of these nine categories: a contribution to a collective work, a part of a motion picture or other audiovisual work, a translation, a supplementary work, a compilation, an instructional text, a test, answer material for a test, or an atlas.

If you’re a freelancer and just one of these requirements isn’t met, it isn’t a WFH and you keep the copyright. One of the biggest misconceptions I see with freelancers is that they usually assume once the work is complete, they no longer have ownership rights and walk away, not realizing that they still own the copyright.

So for example, if you’re hired as a cinematographer on a film, as long as you and the employer agreed in writing that it’s a WFH, the copyright will be owned by the employer, since film is always a custom job and is one of the nine categories specified under copyright law.

How will you know if you’re an independent contractor? Look for factors like like greater control over the work, using your own equipment, working out of your own home or office, working on your own time, employment end dates, words like “freelance” or “independent contractor,” etc.

 

Moving Forward


Believe it or not, it’s not always easy to tell whether you’re an employee or an independent contractor, and you and the employer may have different views on it. In many cases, you might find that the employer refers to you as an “employee” even though from the outside it looks like you’re a freelancer. Maybe you work in the employer’s office and you receive a salary, but you’re using your own gear and set your own hours. How do you deal with an employment situation where it’s unclear what your status is?

Clarity is the antidote to that kind of ambiguity. Every employment contract should state whether, a) you’re being hired as an employee or a contractor, and b) whether you or the employer retains the copyright. In fact, WFH can get so muddled that I’ve stopped using the term in any contract I draft. I simply state which party retains the copyright because the actual words “work for hire” can cause more confusion than they resolve.

Film producers, take note: Be clear and concise when hiring. It’ll help avoid any copyright ownership conflict down the road. If you’re a filmmaker looking to get hired on your next job, make sure you discuss what to do with that copyright in every contract you sign with an employer. You will probably have to give it up in the end, but that’s the price for continuing to work in a field you love. And if you’re an employee in the film industry where job security is scant, you may not own the copyright to your work, but you can take solace in the fact that you have a steady job. MM


Have a legal question you want our advisers to answer in a future installment of Cinema Law? Send it into staff@moviemaker.com with the subject line “Cinema Law Question.”

Gregory R. Kanaan, Esq. is a Boston-based attorney representing artists, filmmakers and designers in Massachusetts and New York. His practice focuses on entertainment and art law, as well as intellectual property issues. He has resolved disputes involving copyrights, publicity rights, trademarks, and contractual disputes for a wide range of independent filmmakers and design professionals. 

Prior to becoming an attorney, Mr. Kanaan was a television producer, creating documentaries and series for The Discovery Channel, Court TV, TLC, and A&E, among others. When not practicing law, Mr. Kanaan writes for his blog, The [Legal] Artist, which aims to educate creative professionals on the legal issues that affect them most. 

The answers to legal questions provided here are for general education and information purposes only, and are not legal advice or legal opinions. The information provided in this article is not intended to create a lawyer-client relationship between Mr. Kanaan and a reader.
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Tuesday, January 05, 2016

10 Habits of Highly Effective Writers by Robert Blake Whitehill

10 Habits of Highly Effective Writers

All writers dream of knocking out thousands of words a day, publishing multiple books a year and seeing them all skyrocket to the top of the bestseller lists across the country. We dream because it’s a difficult task and not everyone has the drive to take the right steps. But of the people who do, they generally have instituted these 10 habits into their writing life to make sure that they are giving themselves the best chance to write something great. Here are the good habits you should develop and add in your writing life if you want to find success.

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This guest post is by Robert Blake Whitehill. Whitehill is a classically trained actor, a critically acclaimed novelist, and an award-winning screenwriter. He has earned film festival wins at the Hudson Valley Film Festival and the Hamptons International Film Festival, and has written many highly rated episodes of the Discovery-Times Channel’s “The New Detectives,” “Daring Capers” and “The Bureau.”  

He lives in Montclair, N.J., with his wife and son, and when not cruising on the Chesapeake, or knocking around the sky over Tangier Island in a Cessna 152, Whitehill blogs and posts on Twitter about his home waters, and has crafted a number of articles for Chesapeake Bay Magazine. 

For more information, please visit robertblakewhitehill.com.


1. READ

Yes, this really is about writing. So, I mean it. Read everything. Authors can get so swept up in our core writing, feeding the ravenous social media beastie, and schlepping hither and yon for signings, that the window for reading narrows into a gunslit blocking all but a ray or two of literary sunlight. Focus on your subject area, but also broaden your tastes. 

You’ll have a deeper reservoir of tropes and details in which to dip your quill. Refreshing your inner author with invigorating reading will help prevent your style from becoming stale. The evocative power of reading is what inspired you to write in the first place, isn’t it? Stay connected to that wellspring of fresh ideas.

2. MANAGE TIME

When will you write? Before work, or after? On the weekends, or during the week? One hour-long session each week? Longer? More often? Be very specific with yourself, especially starting out, about the time you will commit to writing. 

Log and track your hours if you need to. Act like your own unreasonable boss. A few weeks of practicing mindful diligence will teach you how many pages you can produce in a given time period, and help you understand how to set and meet your goals. 

One thing effective, productive writers do not do is wait for inspiration. They go looking for it on a schedule, usually finding it very close by their computers or tablets.

3. SET GOALS

You somehow knew that was coming, didn’t you? Set goals you can easily achieve. Set the bar low, then lower it even more, so you always step away from your writing session with a success, with a win, with progress. Whether you commit to two pages a week, or to twenty-five, as I do, make sure you get your pages done. 

If work, family, or any other facet of life glints you into distraction, stay up a little later that night, or get up a little earlier next day, so your goal is achieved. Fast or slow, stay on track like a freight train.

4. MANAGE SPACE

What kind of writing space do you need to be productive? In the past, I sometimes wrote in busy cafes. For a time, I wrote between calls in the map room of the Montclair Ambulance Unit where I served as an EMT. Later I rented an office at C3 Workplace, where the only sick people were the characters in my head. Now I happily work in my home. Find or create the right space, the feng shui, the décor, and the soundscape that helps you do the work before you.

5. SET BOUNDARIES

Family and friends must get used to the idea that your writing is important to you. [Like this quote? Click here to Tweet and share it!] It requires time apart from the folks you love best, and who love you dearly. Repeat as kindly, and as firmly as you can that whatever else your roles in life might be, you are also a writer. Writing is not your hobby. It is not something to do to pass the time while waiting for folks to be available to distract you. Honor your calling. Honor your loved ones. 

Demonstrate a passionate devotion required by this consuming commitment to your people, and to yourself. They might grumble now and then, but they will get used to it. They will also share in your pride of accomplishment down the road.

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6. FINISH

Complete your drafts! Don’t be the writer with that over-edited first chapter that’s been spun into absolute gold, but has nothing readable following it. [Like this quote? Click here to Tweet and share it!] I had a chance to hear Professor Charles Stegeman tell his Haverford College painting students over and over again to cover the whole canvas right away, then go back to polish the details. Was I painting then? No, I was modeling for the class, naked as a jaybird, and still as a stone, so I heard this exhortation plenty. By the end of every class, I also saw the wonderful results. 

Some days, yes, I warm up for writing by rereading the last couple of pages from the day before. Sure, I might toss in an easy edit or two. Then my daily goal beckons me forward into mysterious new territory, ever onward to completion of the draft. Now please stop thinking about me naked. That was many cheeseburgers ago.

7. NO SHOPPING

I learned this from my father, short-story author, and novelist, Joseph Whitehill. Do not shop your story ideas. Tell not a soul. Keep your thoughts secret. Say nothing until that first draft is complete. Don’t fear your idea will be lifted and plagiarized. That is possible, but unlikely. 

There is another kind of thief much closer to home. If you try to beguile and fascinate your family, friends, or lovers with the precious coin of your creativity too soon, it’s possible you will vitiate and squander that soul-twisting impetus to get it all down on paper. Ignoring my father’s advice, I regaled this friend, or that object of my desire, with some very juicy plots. Didn’t I have to justify calling myself a writer somehow? These cool plots were ample proof I was the genuine article, right? Wrong. 

It had the opposite effect on my output, and on my self-esteem. On more than one occasion I awoke the next day to discover that I could not even remember what my grand idea was. It was gone, leaving only a smoky, taunting wisp of a notion behind, like a half-forgotten dream receding into oblivion. 

To make matters worse, no one to whom I blabbed ever asked how that idea I confided had turned out, or when it would be published. Sit with that agonizing hot clinker of story burning in your gut until you’ve written it all down. Then, tell your friends. Hell, tell the world, because now you’ve earned the right.

8. CULTIVATE YOUR TEAM

In addition to helping your loved ones understand how important writing is to you, you will need a few folks in your corner with specific roles beyond missing your face while you are holed up at your work. Your committed listener will field your emails or calls about how you are sticking to your page count goals every week, or even every day. 

Your editor, as Richard Marek (Robert Ludlum’s editor on the Bourne series) did for me, will tell you the truth about your work, and offer suggestions on how to make it better. 

Your proofreader will give your manuscript that polished, professional look, as Suzanne Dorf Hall does for my stuff. 

You will need a cover artist to make your book leap off the shelf into a reader’s hands, as Studio042 does for my work. 

Perhaps you need an agent, or a manager, like my indispensable friend and confidant, Liza Moore Ledford. 

Whether you opt for independent publishing, or a legacy publishing deal, you will need a brash, dazzling PR team to help the world find you. For that, I go with Shelton Interactive every time. Find the people, the companies, who understand your work, and who are committed to your success not only as a writer, but as an author.

9. LOVE YOUR READERS

I don’t mean that you necessarily should have warm feelings for your readers. Real love is not just a feeling. It’s a job description. For the sake of argument, let us imagine a reader can comfortably tackle one page of a book every two minutes. 

This imaginary reader has an average heart rate of 70 beats per minute (except during the riveting parts of the story where that rate better shoot up. A lot.) So, that 400-page book will take about 800 minutes to read, or around fourteen hours for those of you playing the home version of our game. 

More to the point, that means your reader expends at least 56,000 irretrievable heartbeats on your work, out of a finite allotment of 2.25 billion lub-dubs. Put that way, you can see this is a truly enormous commitment. Honor and appreciate your readers’ investment by doing your very best work. It cannot be about the money for you. Be sure that your readers’ time feels well-spent, and not a pointless sacrifice.

10. COMMUNICATE

Be available to your readers. Give them an email address where they can reach you, confident of your eventual reply. In addition to doing your best work, this is how you build a community of devoted readers. It may sound tedious, but after writing my first book alone for so long, I found that meeting and hearing from readers—my very own readers—made it all worthwhile, far outweighing a considerable financial return. 

Some writers might believe that good work is all that’s due and owing to one’s public. 

Now you know I disagree. In addition to hearing from readers, you might find yourself fielding questions from other writers in need of advice. This is a great compliment. Offer what thoughts you can. Be the author you wished you could talk to when you were starting out. 

As evidence of my sincerity, I can be reached at rbw@robertblakewhitehill.com. It would be a pleasure to hear what you think of my Ben Blackshaw Series, or to answer any questions that come to mind.